Scary Car Ride #Writing Practice

Topic/Question: Have you ever had a scary car ride?

        Yes, I have. Now, I am telling you about my scary-car-ride experience. I remember that happened while I was travelling with my family to Hua Hin by the car that had sooner been bought than it was being driven. In the other words, it was very new and came with the red license plate in its front. My father was so sleepy during his long drive since he had not taken enough time for sleeping.

Then' the accident happened: my car was driven out from the the road to the bridge and fell nearby a dirty canal. I, together with the others in the car, was very shocked with this! The canal was very much smelly that let me think I would vomit if I could. Suddenly, my father turned his consciousness back. He opened his eyes and saw what had happened. Luckily, as a mechanic, my father can quickly fix the cars wheels and recheck the engine's system not to explode the car. I was so proud of his prudence and tact. Eventually, I told my father to take a long rest on the rear seat and let my mother drive instead. From this happening, I have got the lesson that our physical health is very important of not only driving but also our daily routines. What do you think about this?